by cochise Jul 17, 2005
category :
Love, romance /
desired love
Look at her, thats the love of your life, |
by Sean Allen
I liked the poem for both its message (nice story) and the choice in words, along with the occasional rhyme and nice rhythm. I think you should work on formatting a bit though, as really long lines are a bit hard to read and follow, especially when they are so long they take up more than one line. |