That was lovely, i liked how the urgency actually came out in your writing as wella s the words in the first verse :D

this is really well written, you've approached the subject with taste instead of just making it "smutty" lol. The end was really effective as well.

wow... very very, VERY interesting. This is me when I'm reading your poem

1st Stanza
*reading* *reading* *reading*
"We smell a mix of sweat and sex"
*raised eyebrow*

2nd stanza
*stares closer at the screen*
*reading* *reading *reading*
"You run your mouth over my body,
And my urge almost explodes."
*is it hot in here or is it just me?*

3rd stanza
*has hand over mouth*
*reading* *reading* *reading*
"You finally come and it gets me going,
We finish together in sweet bliss."
*eyes widen, and stares blanklessly at screen*

4th Stanza
*gulps*
*reading* *reading* *reading*
"After sharing something so wonderful and unique to us.
It makes me fall in love with you,
All over again."
*smiles, and nods saying "that was good"* ^_^x

awww...so romantic!! keep up the good work!!

^_^ i luv ur poem it wuz really sexy lol! keep it up kid!

wow.... this poem is seductive! very nicely done

It is written well, and obviously you wrote about something you liked. Not the kind of thing I normally read.

Nice job keep up the good work i liek the deepness of your poem 5.5

'Sweet Bliss' Would also be a good name for this...and lol, I like the poem, but didn't want to know your and your boyfriend did that;) But, whether this sounds gay or what, I love sex because it shows how much you *can* love someone. (Though I've never done it, mind you.)

Love
DarkSuicide

I never read anything like this before, such passion!

I like this part the most:

"It makes me fall in love with you,
All over again."

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