This poem was so sad. You put alot of feeling into it though. Keep it up xX

?! shocking, thats what this poem was. complete twists in the story. I love it. description was excellent. Though it should be in dark poems, because this is probably a family's worst nightmare. Great job, and keep up the good work.

Take Care,
Renee

wow that poem was so sad. bad think is that lots of ppl live like that. great poem. i could really feel for the girl. good job- lizzi

*pissed off* you know when a man hits a woman and child for no comparent reason, he is not a man, and written a coward is too good for him. He is low, trash, and nothing more than that!... Sorry if I offended you or your "father", but damn it... We're men here! We were supposed to be raised with a certain feel of morality and respect. If anyone hurt you like this, you have to call someone or the police! Someone with great potential shouldn't have to go through this!... I'm sorry for ranting, I guess you can say, I was raised to be honorable and chivalerous (or however you spell it).
I do hope you stay strong and safe. (Man, I'm in the butt-kicking mood now. O well, time to fight EVIL AGAIN! MWAHAHAHA!!!... sorry about that) ^_^x

very powerful and sad poem :(! you put alot of thought into it. i liked it very much.

It is really good. The story is done really well. It is easy to read, and structurally good. Flows well. REads like story form with complete senteces and correct punctuation--great job.

Wow thats sooo sad!! It made me cry, i really hope this doesnt happen to anyone! 5/5 for sure, excellent literary use! If you could check out some of my poems that would be great, i think you'd enjoy them:)

All the best,
Ana*

AMazing poem!....sad though...very emotional and awesomely written!.....it had a great flow to it as well.... keep up da awesome work! 5/5...Also thanx for comment on my poems it meant alot to me! thanx! Take care! byez! xoxo
~Chica~

aww i liked that...all abusive father/husbands should go straight to h3ll ^.^ but really great poem, even though it didnt rhyme

check out mine sometime please <3<3

omgsh. you are very good.. its really neat how you can make the reader feel so much anger, and feel scared while they're reading it.. its really cool. Keep Up The Good Work!! :D
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Such a sad poem but good writing .......keep smiling

This poem reminded me of my childhood.
It was really well writen.

5/5 from me to you.

You've done an excellent job on this poem. It kinda remind me of the poem I written myself and for some reason, I heart reading sad poems. =(

My favourite line in the whole poem, that changes everything was:

"The minute she stopped running,
a truck pulled up to her.
The same truck that had taken her mommy to the hospital,
the same truck her daddy drove."

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(='.'=)
(")-(") Arrivederci!

That was a gr8 poem but im sorry if something along those lines has happened 2 u or sum 1 u no it is really sad. plz read and comment on sum of mine.

Wow thats so sad!! powerful and well writen though. keep up the good work, luv courtie

I really loved this one it's so very well writtena and very nice detail and useage of words. 10/10