I really like that, and its a really important subject too. The poem flowed and rhymed well :D

not a bad poem, but didn't like captialization on mid words.

i like the meaning behind the poem it was really good. but the only thing that i even struggle with is getting the lines the same length, other than that i like it good job

this was a very nice job and what you are saying in the poem was smooth and great

Good jobz

-Josiah

Great poem. Did you send it to the childrens fund. If you didn't you should. I have been suporting them for years.

WHOA! Magnificent job on this one my friend! Well worth the five I must say! Story's like these make me so sick to my stomach! I just hate to think people live that way and its funny because every time I feel down about my life about the littlest things I always find myself telling me to shut up because people have it way worst like this little girl! Great Job on this!
Kind Regards,
~Chelsey~

Great writing, a very true and important thought. Good luck with influencing people, you have the ability too. Keep on writing!
luv kt

I liked the truthfulness of this poem, and the way it was written, despite the deliberate rhyming scheme. I reallu like it, and hope that it helps to put peoples' lives into perspective.

Kalika