Daddy why?

That was really well written, and so sad...I hope that you have never really experienced that....Keep up the good work.

-Dol

that is so sad.did that really happen? my best friend is my boyfriends sister and their dad killed their mom and he was abusing marissa (my best friend) and marcos (my boyfriend) saw it and ran over their and got his sister and they waent into their twin brother and sisters room.the next day marcos and i went to the hospital and told the nurse to hold the baby for a while.i was going over to his house after that and when we were ther marcos saw marissa leying there on the floor with blood everywhere.his dad grabbed marcos and pushed me out and locked the door. i heard screaming and yell ing and i swear to god i didn't care what i did i had to get in that house.i called the police first and then i broke a window and went in. his dad was beating the crap out of him so i socked his dad and pushed him in the bathroom and locked him in.i got marcos and marissa and marissa was beat to death.then morcos told me to take care of his brother and sister.then he gave me one more kiss and got his moms white gold hoops that she gave to him and told him to give to the girl he truly loves.he gave them to me and told me he loved me.then he died too.his dad got out of the bathroom and started hitting me.by then the police came. i had always told marcos to let me help him with his dad.i'm the only person who knew about his dad hitting him. know my first true love is dead because i didn't say anything to anyone.that happened last week.but right now im wearing the gold hoop earings that have been in his family for years.

Its good

Its good

this is a great poem... i hope this never happened 2 u tho... the content is really sad, but the actual poem is really good... well done!