When i Talk To U

Awwww, that was great poem but at same time it was sad(CRYING)..lol i give 5/5 that was PERFECT.keep the good work i love it

Jammal

Hey omg this just happened to me yesterday...it was a guy i loved so much and thne i got a text message saying im sorry i dont want to go out with you n e more.....i know how you feel

this is awesome but very sad. i'm sry. sum guys r just like that. well keep up the good work. luv ya,
*~*ASH*~*

You seem to be good at writing, but I'm just not feeling your poems, I'm not saying you suck, I just think you need to work on them. Everyone has potential to write poetry, so don't give up, but honestly, you do need some work. xX

Here's some advice :
1) Make it longer.
2) Instead of just putting "u" put the real word, it looks better.
3) Proof read it before you send it in, because there are some grammar problems in this poem, like "and" should be "an" . Not a huge mistake, but still needs to be fixed.
4) I don't know if you wanted this poem to rhyme, but if you did, than you could have put this for your last line " But then you sent me an email saying you no longer wanted me by your side " or something like that, that way, it rhymes with the last word in your second line "inside". That's just a suggestion.

I hope I helped a little. Keep writing, you have lots of potential.

Erikka ♥

:O
that has power
i love it!