In the third line maybe switch the words "just" and "isn't" it flows better that way...6th line the rythm is a little off...try at the end switching it to "by my side" instead of "right here beside" in the 2nd stanza you have thy instead of they...isolation should be isolating...you have lie instead of line...realease should be realize...and one big one...instead of plea-which i believe means something like beg, i think you mean plead...which means something like declare.

Now don't get me wrong, i LOVE this poem! you have major talent for being 14, you just have some common mistakes...plead my insanity is a great line, very original, very cool. You seriously have SOOOO much talent, I hope you don't think I went too hard on you, I'm just trying to help!!! and if you want, you can critique a poem of mine to hell :P
You are so talented, never drop your pen! KIU! oh and I'm adding you to my favorites RIGHT NOW so i can follow you becoming famous!! lol...ur good girl, ya really are!
xoxo-Sierra Rae

Dont listen to james you need to get the message across i think it was a great poem and i hope you keep it up i like your style it gets the point across i know what your saying and i feel for you and i want to say keep it up you have nothing to worry about your peotry is amazing and i will read all your new ones!!! keep the good work up and i will try and work on mine thanl you for the comment i will try my hardest to use all of your sugestions...

keep it up

a new friend in poetry kevin