by William Flores Jul 21, 2005
category :
Sadness, depression /
other
I'm tired of this tired and painful feeling |
Cool...Yeah I did like this. Not really that strong but I liked it anyway. Good flow and interesting structure. |
by i love you
soo great!! u are an awesome writer especially at being new to it...i love reading your poems...theyre filled with so much emotion and a great choice of words.....5/5 |
great job here!! nice flow... and you conveyed ur emotions very well!! i can really relate to this one! :) keep up the great work!! |
Try using more physical things to describe what your talking about. This poem seemd to be bogged down slightly with too much talk about feelings and intangible ideas. If you can use things that relate to the senses to describe these things it makes your writing more powerful. |
by pag
all together it was a very good poem. with so much emotion and pain, you're very talented. keep it up |