Comments : It's Only A Matter Of Time...

  • 19 years ago

    by undying blusher

    Nice rhyming...the last stanza is my favorite part...you sure have talent for poetry...

    xxx

  • 19 years ago

    by ScarletHaze

    Good rhyming.

    specially like this bit

    hide my tears and all my pain
    Behind a broken smile and skies of gray
    I watch as I slowly lose all I have gained
    To the sands of time and winds of change

  • 19 years ago

    by pag

    all together it was a very good poem. with so much emotion and pain, you're very talented. keep it up

  • 19 years ago

    by Cory Mastrandrea

    Try using more physical things to describe what your talking about. This poem seemd to be bogged down slightly with too much talk about feelings and intangible ideas. If you can use things that relate to the senses to describe these things it makes your writing more powerful.

  • 19 years ago

    by LostHopesCrimsonTears

    great job here!! nice flow... and you conveyed ur emotions very well!! i can really relate to this one! :) keep up the great work!!

    *~peace and love~*

  • 19 years ago

    by i love you

    soo great!! u are an awesome writer especially at being new to it...i love reading your poems...theyre filled with so much emotion and a great choice of words.....5/5

  • 19 years ago

    by Momentary Relapse

    Cool...Yeah I did like this. Not really that strong but I liked it anyway. Good flow and interesting structure.