I liked this poem a lot, my only criticism is that you didn't need to use "cuz" and "coz," you could just use "because" and "since" or whatever, there are plenty of words you can use.

I agree with Sean Allen, you could use a lot better words to portray the poem. Instead of using slang, use unique words. Other than that, this poem was nice. I'm glad you're in our club, welcome!
Dorotea