This is a very well done peice, it has your flow and your markings, your rythem and your sense of judgement. I think it is truely a great job on this poem and i don't know why you don't feature this one. it is in my opinion one of your better ones. I was suprised at how many people voted and commented on it, i think it is amazing...wonderful job.

again, great poem, you have talent:) check out mine sometime if you likexXxX

Good Poem. Focusing on the big picture, rather then your own problems. I like it :) nice work, kind regards from Kane

It sounds like thought writing (atleast that is what I call it). Sounds like you wrote down a bunch of your own thoughts. That isn't a bad thing. Actually teh simple fact that you didnt repeat yourself really is pretty good. When most people write like this they repeat themselves.

Emotions, judgement, and a beautiful word choice all interwoven into a poem, its excellent. Now if only I could start writing as good as you...

/: Shadow--Stalker :\

Excellent poem..most cant write like that..you have great talent..

Excellent poem.You really are a good writer.Dont stop!
Thnx for the comment!

*~JAMIE~*

Really powerful emotions in this one. It really does focus a lot more on other things instead of just u, so it has a much deeper meaning than it seems to have. I really love it a lot, excellent write! ^^

great poem. the rhyming was excellent

Good poem, keep up the good work. Have you had an email that chat room will be closed down soo, Due to mis used by people

This is such a truthfull poem. It flows nicley, and is something everyone should think about. good job 5/5

Wow nice poem...keep up the great work....and readin your poetry was my pleasure...thanks for the comments on mine....luv yas mwah

-kayla-

Hey undying blusher!
I'm not even sure if I've commented on any of your poems yet, but I've been so busy, sorry. This one is the first one i've read, and omg I love it already! I can't wait to read more!

I usually don't enjoy poems that do not rhyme, but this has given me a whole ew perspective on reading and enjoying poems. Very well done M'Dear.

My favourite lines are:

"And to go further, my pain is less than nothing next to His, being forsaken with the weight of the world on his shoulders
And this all for me, for everyone who was, is, and will be."

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(")-(") Arrivederci!

The last paragraph.. is like me..

"....comparisons get me nowhere..." i like that line and its something i completely agree with because you can really compare your problems or your reactions to your problems to someone else simply because youre not that other person everyone is different; their pain and their tolerence towards it..... great job..... very insiteful