wow,
good poem! keep it up!
hey and if u get time u should make a profile.
peace,
*rachel*

great poem and great style! Good work

very beautiful, ^,^

very well written. i cant wait for more. 5/5. xxx

nice one too.. but i thot it lacked the 'spice' that is needed in a poem such as this one.. and ur flow was only a bit off.. but i lykd ur words, especially the last stanza.
keep goin!
nouna

I can relate to this in a way.... 5/5

I have been in a situation exactly like this before, and i loved the way that you voiced it! 5/5

I think you left out a couple words here and there such as the second line i think you meant to say *you've opened MY heart...* maybe not but it sounds better that way and *im ONE one call away...*

really good story line your rhymes were quite elementary *me and be and things like that* however you did keep the consistancy so that was good, good job ill give it a 4/5

Ah ! excellent work !! clould rhyme better but good job indeed