No more....

by BleedingAngel   Jul 24, 2005


So you think your pain don't show
that you can hide away your tears
but let me tell you, every body knows
and they have known for years

You think they don't notice your wrists
and scars under your long sleeves
but trust me they know all of this
they know how you make yourself bleed

Lately you have gotten really thin
but you think that you can hide it
listen to me hun, I see your pain within
and I want to help your out of this Sh*it

Starving yourself isn't the right way
I've done that so many times before
hear me sweetie, trust me when I say
stop this madness, please hun no more

I'm reaching my hand for you to take
you and I, we will make it through
now show me a smile that isn't fake
once again show me the real you

*Didn't know how to end this, so I'll might chance it later....This poem is suppose to be written with my brothers girlfriends word (like she is telling me all of this)....thank you so much for reading, I know it's not that good*

Copyright 2005 - Sabrina Stelmach

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  • 19 years ago

    by Jason Meres

    I like it, it's very well pulled across and described.

  • 19 years ago

    by undying blusher

    I hope you let her help you get through...take her hand...

    "So you think your pain don't show
    that you can hide away your tears
    but let me tell you, every body knows
    and they has been for years"

    ^That last line threw me off...it doesn't really make sense...maybe "and they have known for years" or "and it has shown for years" ...something like that.

    In the third stanza: "and I want to help your out of this Sh*it" - *you (out of...)

    "I know it's not that good" - Don't say that! You think that, you do not know that. I find this poem very good. It is touching and written very nicely.
    You have a way with words...the wording makes it read well...

    Oh, and I like the ending...it's meaningful...I wouldn't worry about it if I were you.

    xxx

  • 19 years ago

    by Sarah Ann

    Very emotional and well written. Keep it up

  • 19 years ago

    by Poetic Tragedy08

    I know how this feels, ya know, and to even be the person hiding it, so i know both ends of it! 5/5

  • 19 years ago

    by XnotaprettygirlX

    sad...but good..5/5

    well done

    love in christ

    angel.

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