Great poem there, liked it alot, maybe you could devide it up in paragraphs though?.p

Best wishes,
Patrik

this is pretty great... you did a good job. It's got good description in it and it flows well... but for some reason i can't get into it right now.. its not because i dont like it or think its not good, its just cuz of the mood im in... blah.. but yeah... thanks for checking out my poems... i apreciate it alot!
take care of you
amanda

...i loved it.