Sadness And Pain

by xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex   Jul 24, 2005


Sadness and pain seek me,
They will not leave me alone.
As I seek out the sun,
I hear a silent drone.
It seems my heart has broken,
And my soul torn apart,
It seems I may not find this light,
That hides from my heart.
I scream your name,
Begging for your attention once more,
I have now just given up;
I will not even try to open that door.

Pain sears through my body,
As I scream out in rage,
I've taken my final step,
Off of this ledge.
Now no one can stop me,
Though no one would try,
So I die by means,
Of suicide.

See what you've done to me,
Broken me apart?
I could take no more;
It has shattered my heart.

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  • 18 years ago

    by xxEvilAngelxx

    Perfect as it is. Don't change a thing. 5/5 =D

  • 18 years ago

    by Lauren Waszkiewicz

    Excellent.. Great write, i love it, i just kind of invisioned this girl she she was well u know what i mean. this was gerat! it flowed nice. i liked the broken up rhyme scheme., it was vrey different!!

    only one real prob icould find-I will not even try to open that door.
    i think this line is too long for its one like(status?) but too short as two. i think i should be- I will not even attempt to open that (some adj?) door.

    just my ideas tho,

    overall, jsut awesome. and i cant type so theres prolly a bunch a mistakes up ther^.. but im tiered. lol.

    5/5

    x33 Th

  • 19 years ago

    by .

    OMG this is really good! 5/5 Deffinately! Keep it up you have talent!
    Thanks for the comment.
    Becky
    xoxo

  • 19 years ago

    by shawn hoskins

    Very good one also you know how to write about the dark side of life 5/5

  • 19 years ago

    by Geena

    Ive felt this way, your words really bring out the emotion in your work, i like it. and i do remeber you.

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