Beautifully written. I love it:D Keep up the good work sweets *hugs*

~Jessica

I don't know what you meant this to mean...but my boyfriend just broke up with me and this poem really touched me like really it did....

I scream your name,
Begging for your attention once more,
I have now just given up;
I will not even try to open that door.

i think you have just worded my feelings better then i can....those lines were perfection...

As I seek out the sun,
I hear a silent drone.

that was my least favorite stanza simply because im not a fan of the word drone lol i think its an ugly word...but thats pure opinion so 5/5

Ive felt this way, your words really bring out the emotion in your work, i like it. and i do remeber you.

Very good one also you know how to write about the dark side of life 5/5

OMG this is really good! 5/5 Deffinately! Keep it up you have talent!
Thanks for the comment.
Becky
xoxo

Excellent.. Great write, i love it, i just kind of invisioned this girl she she was well u know what i mean. this was gerat! it flowed nice. i liked the broken up rhyme scheme., it was vrey different!!

only one real prob icould find-I will not even try to open that door.
i think this line is too long for its one like(status?) but too short as two. i think i should be- I will not even attempt to open that (some adj?) door.

just my ideas tho,

overall, jsut awesome. and i cant type so theres prolly a bunch a mistakes up ther^.. but im tiered. lol.

5/5

x33 Th

Perfect as it is. Don't change a thing. 5/5 =D