Darkness Inside

by xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex   Jul 24, 2005


The darkness inside,
Will keep you alive,
But you can not hide,
What lives inside.
It will meet you everyday,
It will watch you in every way,
It will hear what you say,
And lead you its own way.
Hold on tight,
Don't try to fight,
And it just might,
Let you see the light.
But now be bold and say,
'You can't treat me this way!
I won't give you anytime of day,
And won't listen to what you say!'
But at least you tried,
To beat suicide,
But the monster inside,
Simply wanted you to die.
Now walk these dark corridors,
Staring at the floors;
Walk down these shores,
To meet Hell's doors.

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  • 18 years ago

    by Lauren Waszkiewicz

    Also- i forgot to mention, i loved the rhyming, it was wayy more mautre than some of your older ones. lol. thats not saying anything bad. lol

  • 18 years ago

    by Lauren Waszkiewicz

    Twas amazing.,So Powerful it twisted and turned and went in crazy directions.. it kept my attention all the way throughout. nothing wrong, except the !'s.. to me they make it seem like a funny poem.., whch it most certainly is not.

    other than that AMAZING!!

    if anyone say this isnt a 5. they are idiots.

    =]]

    xx33

  • 19 years ago

    by shawn hoskins

    That one was very good youve got away with words good ryhme to it.

  • 19 years ago

    by Jamie

    Ahhh i LOVED this SO much the entire thing is incredible, the only part i think you staggered a little in was the very end i felt it coulda used a better ending but wow dude, i loved this, rhyming is such a wonderful thing lol and you know how to do it well....5/5!

    It will meet you everyday,
    It will watch you in every way,
    It will hear what you say,
    And lead you its own way.

    those were my favorite lines...you are a really talented person...dont let anyone tell you different ever, i look forward to reading the rest of your stuff yay!

  • 19 years ago

    by Andrea

    Wow...i loved how you rhymed every 4 lines. thats awesome. good job

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