definitely dark.. well done.. gr8 rhyme..
keep up the gud work
nouna

Wow, dark but very powerful, I loved it. You're on my fav's now btw, keep it up.

great.... its not good if you feel like this... but you ahve talent.. thats for sure.. keep up the work... and if you ever need to talk to someone my sn on aol is CuteLovePancake.. so im me sometime if you have it...
take care of you
amanda

good poem!!!!!!creepy to lol!

Neato! I love the way you jsut wrote this poem and the way you rhyme! good work on this one!10/5 lol

Wow...i loved how you rhymed every 4 lines. thats awesome. good job

Ahhh i LOVED this SO much the entire thing is incredible, the only part i think you staggered a little in was the very end i felt it coulda used a better ending but wow dude, i loved this, rhyming is such a wonderful thing lol and you know how to do it well....5/5!

It will meet you everyday,
It will watch you in every way,
It will hear what you say,
And lead you its own way.

those were my favorite lines...you are a really talented person...dont let anyone tell you different ever, i look forward to reading the rest of your stuff yay!

That one was very good youve got away with words good ryhme to it.

Twas amazing.,So Powerful it twisted and turned and went in crazy directions.. it kept my attention all the way throughout. nothing wrong, except the !'s.. to me they make it seem like a funny poem.., whch it most certainly is not.

other than that AMAZING!!

if anyone say this isnt a 5. they are idiots.

=]]

xx33

Also- i forgot to mention, i loved the rhyming, it was wayy more mautre than some of your older ones. lol. thats not saying anything bad. lol