i think its a great song! i wrote one as well. I Do. i loved it. what type of song is this going to be? what genre i mean. great!

Mike

Cute poem! It really flows with a tempo & rhythm like a song -- very cool. You've done a great job explaining your feelings & views in this poem. Keep it up!
-Kate

~Good poem~5

Yeah, I thought it sounded a lot like a song. Great job, I like the rhythm. 5/5.

This poem..is tureing great ..love your work..5/5

I could tell it was a song...I really like it. My favorite piece so far...

I love these lines:
"Your kisses they fall on me, begging me to stay,
But your actions, they tell me, to go the other way..."

Great work. Different from the other two I read. Nice repetition... the part with music playing on the radio is great...I can definitely imagine...I use music like that sometimes...

xxx

I like it and the way you set it all up good job i love the meaning of this poem =)

keep up the good work

-Josiah

Beautiful song!! Kinda sad, but really really great! Love it!! Love you more though!!!! :)