by lisa Jul 24, 2005
category :
Sadness, depression /
other
People don't know the real me |
by Devon
I like your ideas! I dont hate you! love your work! it sort of relate to some part of my life too. |
by David
Great poem 5/5 |
That is so true I hate it when people don't see that they are hurting you physically or mentally it doesn't matter it still hurts. I wish I could write like you. your a very good poet keep up the good work |
I think Vino's right about the rhyme scheme, preferably at the end line. Your poem is an honest expression of the reality of life..it's blunt and it's good. Aim high!! |
by Ike Dizzle
I get the message, but it will be more effective with a rhyme sceme(i think i spelled that wrong but you get the point). |