that was a great song. u should write more. ur a great writer. thank u for commenting on my poems.

thats super sad. holy crap. its really good. i can totally imagine it as a song. wooaa!! thnx for commenting on my..bubbles. lol. yeah. bye!
p.s...visit me sometime (well..my poems) lol.yeah, ttyl!
-nancy

that was an excellent poem!! great job!! keep it up! *May*

i loved it.. especially the chorus (or the one u kept repeating).. it was full of emotion and the rhyme was simple, but had a gr8 impact on me..
keep goin
thnx 4 the comment
nouna

amazing!!! you have so much talent. keep it up!
-xXx-

wow, that is really cool. i like it a lot. thanks for your comments on my poems. God bless and take care. ciao~lyn

great write/song
did u write music to it too?
thx for c/r on my poems

love always

Natalie

Excellent poem... or perhaps I shoul say song?:p Liked it alot, really touching.

Best wishes,
Patrik

You are an awesome writer. Keep it up. I loved reading ur stuff. <3 :)

i liked it. you did a good job!

This would make an awsome song. So much emotion. I loved it! 5/5! Keep up the talent!

Would love to hear this as the actual song, sounds interesting. I think the lines "So I ask you please don't make me cry.
I'm so tired of wiping my eyes." may sound a little better as "So I ask you please don't make me cry
I'm so tired of drying these overworn eyes"
Maybe that's just me? Overall, I think it flowed really well and would be really good as a song. Let me know if yuo ever get it to music. Kim x

Very well written, the flow was perfect, had nothing wrong so i definately gave it a 5/5, and nice title to, creative! great job!

i really like this poem. I've added you to my favourites. xoxox

i can see read a little bit of the song in there

your flow and ryme are awsome much better than any of my poems i have to work on that good job i love this one i'll go check out some more of yours!

its sad but great.
keep up the gd work.

Jacs
xxx

I love that and it is so true. it makes a great song. and thanks for the comment on my poem=)

This is such a beautifully sad poem...i love the repetition....and i think that it would make a lovely song, 5/5

Ill comment this just as it's a poem,.. i really dont have a lot to say on this one.. its pretty complete by itself and states the main idea pretty clearly.. one thing that i've seen overused in poetry is tears, and rain. ive used both in my poems, so im not innocent myself, but combining them and showing their likeness; you'd have to do something COMPLETELY original for it not to seem trite.. even then it might still be.. its just a played out subject.. also.. the subject seems to be depression(blue as a symbol). depression(on this site and anywhere else) is really a very popular subject to write about, but the problem is the same with tears and rain, everyone does it so it's hard to make your mark when so many others write about the same thing.. try to generalize your work maybe and not try so much to write about normal things that you've read/wrote.. just something to think about..

Hey omg i love you're writing and i believe (sincerely) that this would make a number one song. The words were so beautifully put together!!!!!!!!!!
Luv always, jess xoxox