Shafts of Light

This was really good~! I liked the concept! I did not really like the part Sunshine-Your light?
Is it really true?
Warm, visable...
But does it complete you?

I don't know it just did not seem to flow at all for me!

Another incredible poem, your so tallented and this poem is such a tribute to that. The short lines really convey the message quite well. the second stanza is my favorite =) awesome job.

Hey, perfect, i read ya profile and i have read some of ya poems, it is good to know who someone is.

Your comment on my 'no' poem was well observed and hit the mark.
I have a conflict within due to the fact Ilive in a place and have found myself in a space where people have no depth/substance or whatever - few do. At times it feeld good to sort of hibernate and take stock of my thoughts.

Your poem, though appearing dark, steps out into the light and celebrates it. That's good because the general tone/subject seems to be the recoil from a relationship where you've been hurt. Your writing is impressive and thoughtful.

Perfectly written! I really like your style in writing poetry! Excellent job!