again, awesome job. the only thing i could suggest is to not use the internet lingo...you know like 'wanna'. its no big deal, just one of my pet peves. i love the poems plot though. greatness. you should check out the site allpoetry.com and maybe join...i like it a lot more than this site and i have a ton more poems on there. check it out. my profile on there is www.allpoetry.com/aboycalledtrevor

thanks
trevor

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