...beautiful...

wow, im like speechless, this has got to be one of my favourite poems ive come across on this site. just beautiful, i loved it :) xxx

death = good

You have really good word choice, beautiful haunting messgae, and can it express it clearly. One sugestion is to reorganize your lines so taht they don't start on one line and end on the next. This ould make your poem longer but some people might find it so addicting that they would want to finish it. As I said before, everything about it is really fantastic.

Beautiful prose... I was completely drawn to your writing from the start. It was beautiful! I will make sure to check out a few more poems!!!

Beautifully written. Dark... emotional... deep. So much thoughts all mingled into one poem and well expressed. Good write. Keep up the good work! 5/5

Wow, this is a very different poem. First off I really liked how you can keep to a structure without having to rhyme! Also you keep a dark atmosphere up throughout the poem, even if you are speaking of something positive. I'd suggest tweaking the ending a tiny bit, because it doesn't sound like an ending to me - maybe divide the last lines up a bit more so the main idea is emphasised? Apart from that though this was very different and interesting to read - nice work :)

WOW!!! Very well written!!! Dark but beautiful!!! You have an amazing talent!!! Great Job!! The things i like about your poems is your an unique writer so u dont find poems that are just like yours!! Your on my favs!!! 5/5

Beautiful. Excellent. 5/5

A very dark and sinister poem, some of the ideas behind this I didnt agree with but you have clearly put much thought into it. It was very erm... for lack of a better word it draws you in and is almost hypnotic...very different...