brilliant! but i think it wouldve been better if you made it rhyme, that wouldve been awesome! but still 5/5!!
great! please comment on mine!
Hayley-Ree xxx

thats great no need to ever change it because not everything canr rhyme sometiimes it has more meaning when it dont then its your true words keep it up:)
lv staz xxxXxxx

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5/5
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