I really like you're style, kinda reminds me of the how the narrator in Fight Club, and that's my favorite movie so i could read your poems all day lol these are really good and the way you don't rhyme is pretty cool makes it have a more edgy sound i guess

You know my thoughts
the way you make my body crave,
yet you leave me

that's my favorite line because i can relate to that and i know those guys too well but yeah your great 5/5

I love it It has so much articulation that it makes it emotional. Good Job 5/5

-standing here waiting for those three worlds that will complete me.

Thats the one thing I didnt quite get.....but other than that I loved it, and I think the emotion was conveyed very strongly!!!!! Good Job!