I like your use of vocabulary, very nice. I think your portrayed an orphans feelings well. And thank your for your comment on my poem Storm...And haha...Yea it was inspired after that night I locked myself out of the house after sneaking out...
~*Freak*~

You write wonderfully in such a short poem! Wow....so sad! do you know someone who was put up for adoption? my sister was adopted into my family when she was six years old! She's been such a happy person since! Welll love the peom! Great Job and i can't wat to read more!

Michelle

Yeah the vocabulary is just so rad, i really liked this poem alot.
My close mate sarah got abanded by her mum when she was born. She got adopted into a family, a really loving family, but it hurts me to think she may feel like this.. I hope she doesnt.
You are full of alot of talent.
5/5
Xox Bam