Very..cool. I'm just now starting to get away from the "lovey-dovey, mushy gushy" stuff, so, this is quite the inspiration! 5/5

Great poem, i really enjoyed it! Keep on writing, you have a very unique style.

Ana*

Great poem. I give it a 5. Check out my poems please.

This peice came with incredible imagery.
The clouds overhead grew darker as I advanced through it.
Perfectly eerie.
~Bravo

great poem.. maybe a helpful idea here. ON the line "Wounds remain open on those who remain" maybe try Wounds sustained stay open on those who remain.. just for the fact that you wont repeat same word.. ANywayz (i'm a novice so eh).. good job much congratulations.

OMG!!! this is AMAZING!! great imagry!!!! i am in awe!!!! keep up the great work!!!!

*~peace and love~*

Amazing poems...love em:D

wow-yeah, i've read all the other comments-they got a point-your poem rawx man...and it IS an inspiration....but let me write me own thoughts if you don't mind-where do such ideas or visions occur? or much better to ask-HOW can such visions occur? well, i now understand how we all write differently...and i SERIOUSLY respect your work...well, i must leave now...hope u read one of me poems-Slave, Trapped [3], or...(i know there's another good one)...oh! and/or Alone [2]...well, until sometime....

deadly poem,

its really dark just how i like it and the flow was reallt good.

your choice of words were also good and dark.

well done :)

i have not read any poetry or written any for that matter in a long time yet just reading this gives me the feelings i used to have when writing. it is really brilliant. keep up the good work. and i hope i will be able to read more of your work.

The streets are paved with mournful souls
nice!
Under the shadow of the blood red steeple
eee! creepy!
Hidden within many shadows lie the snakes red eyes
ooo, i like that!

This is excellent! i am in wow by the way you exaggerate each line to make the detail even better, great job!5/5, if I could go higher I would!

Beautiful beyond words.

Love it. Dark but nice.

I loved it. it was dark and spooky. It was really good. x