by Natalie84
The safeness of his arms...I love that. I do think you over did the "i want you" and "i need you" but again with adding more you could make it work. Add WHY you feel safe in his arms and WHY you need him back... |
by morgan
tis is so sad and good in the same time |
I liked the poem because it shows the finen line between needs and disires and the security of love. great work 5 |
fine line betweeen needs and desires |
hey there... thnx for ue comments on my poems........ im not so sure about this to be honest.. its a bit repetetive...... but you get your point across and the set up is decent.. i ecpeciall like the way u break it up in the middle.... but yea.. well i see the rating is a bit low.. so i gave it a 5 anyways..... i hope that helps... n good luck in the future with writing!! take care!! |
by Catty
Its a neat poem...you've got talent. Please read the first three poems of mine listed and comment to. Be HONEST!!! If it sucks...tell me. Lol....once again...nice poem....keep up the good work |
by shakenangel
i like the way you had two clear halves to the poem. It's short but it is very sweet and delicate. |
by Minkus
Pretty original transition. 5/5. |
Nice poem with strong words, and an ok flow. |
Great poem. I agree with Michael it does show the fine line between needs and desires. keep up the good work and thanx for the comment on my poem |
by Andrea
aww so sweet. nice job |
by Samantha
It's not very organized, but that's just me being nitpicky. Anyway, it's definitely unique. Not bad at all. |
by bucky
good poem interesting concept ... 5/5 keep it up |
thx for the r/c on my poems I'm looking foward to reading more of your stuff 5/5 |
by Mj
thanks for the comment |
by XxTeArSxX17
Nice job i am really sorry i know it hard but in life we dont always ge what we want i know trust me i do keep your head up high. outtie |
I love the title and the messege. It's hard but everything will be ok. Keep up the great work |
by ~Black*Rose~
THis was better than the other one, but check for spelling "I want to be in th safeness of your arms again". and at a point right here "I wish I could know these thing but you know what they say:" It got me verry lost. I hope you don't think im being harsh but i gave it 3/5 |
by Brookeღ
A unique poem with your own style, which is always a plus! You wrote about questions we all wonder about at times! Very well done love poem full of emotion! Take Care! Brooke~ |
by fallen angel
Hey i loved it. it was short n sweet. im glad that i read it. it u manage to get the point across. a beautiful piece of work. xx |