the rhythm seemed a little off, and the rhymes seemed a little bit forced, but thats cool because its hard to rhyme well and maintain good emotion. Good job, though, it felt powerful.

wow... amazing words. i really can relate. keep it up. and please check out my poem"the things you said"
thankss....

really really welldone! ur very talented!
xx*5/5*

great poem. I loved it. 5/5
~blackroseblood~

AMAZING.. I loved it!!! I'm definately adding you to my faves.. Keep up the good work!!! :-)
Stephanie