by Shelbie Jul 29, 2005
category :
Love, romance /
new love
As confusion starts to build inside of me, |
by BrokenMisery
Great work, you had some really powerful lines. Something that might help is just to break free from a structure and just let emotion guide the way. Eventually, you will have your own, unique style. Another thing is to be careful of your punctuation. You don't need set places. Join it all together as if it was a story ad then go through and punctuate where you need to end a sentence or start a new paragraph. |