You need to look at your 3ed line again. Its a good poem

You have a good rhythm here. And the rhymes are good. Nice piece of work.

nice flow! i enjoyed reading it, it is well put together, could u plese comment on mine? i would be so greatful

well done
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hey nice pome lol

nicely writtin...i dont like this one as much as your other one though but good job! luv yas mwah

-kayla-