What a wonderful sad sad poem, amazingly written, good to see another from you, this was a real tear jerker and I feel my eyes welling up now, every event and bad thing, so very sad, the emotion is clear in this poem and I got a feeling of great loss and regret whilst reading it.. though I do not believe in god this was wonderful, the plea to god, the talking of his tears was fantastic.. beautifully written, hats off to you, this is a master piece

I particularly enjoyed this stanza..

"Please let me sleep, don’t wake me please,
So I don’t have to face this hateful world once more,
God please cry to wash us clean, as we stumble in mucky water way to deep to live"

Brilliant work

well done and take care
xxxxx

You words seem to make things more simplar to the reader. Though i grasped the full context of this poem, it only proved to me what a thought-provoking and wonderfully gifted poet you are.
Nice work sweetie.
Luff yah heaps,
-Kal.

Amazing poem!

Really good stuff. I liked reading it.

:] this poem has true meaning.. you really brought a new meaning to rain. America has many flaws and only god's pure tears can wash them away. amazing. i love the way you put it. awsome job
and thanks for your comment and your opinion on "a candle" i can always use someone elses perspective.. the thing is it was sort of supposed to be repetitive and it also had sylables and stuff.. i made it to be a pattern. its confusing.. i think i even confused myself.. i did try reading it again without the "mays" and i might take them out.. so i might just reconstruct the poem.. when i get some time it does sound akward with all of the repitition thanks