by Kelly Katherine Jul 30, 2005
category :
Sadness, depression /
other
Plans are lashing |
Nice the way u express ur thoughts |
Truly an excellent piece.I love the rhyme scheme, more complex than most other rhymimg pieces I've seen on this site.Excellent use of language to express the subject/emotion.The last line has quite an impact.Excellent. |
I'm not a fan of rhyme as it is hard to do well and not be cliche.This is awesome.Your rhyme scheme works well and flows and is unique.And I love what you are saying so eloquently.An excellent piece. |