I'm not a fan of rhyme as it is hard to do well and not be cliche.This is awesome.Your rhyme scheme works well and flows and is unique.And I love what you are saying so eloquently.An excellent piece.

Truly an excellent piece.I love the rhyme scheme, more complex than most other rhymimg pieces I've seen on this site.Excellent use of language to express the subject/emotion.The last line has quite an impact.Excellent.

Nice the way u express ur thoughts