by Catty Jul 30, 2005
category :
Love, romance /
desired love
I sit across the room as I stare quietly at you, |
by Ari
You are making me cry cause that is the exact case w/ me. i'm so sad! 10/5! |
by skye16
I like your poem. I can totally relate. Ofcourse I'm a boy though. lol. |
by nikki
another great poem youve got talent keep up the good work. |
by Synyster
Pretty good poem. I take it you had your heart broken by a crush..? Ouch. It happens. On the poem, nice phrasing, but it still needs a little work. I noticed a few typos. Also, on your second couplet, I wouldn't repeat "me" as your end-rhyme word. The style I write in, I won't ever repeat the same end words in a couplet unless I am repeating the line for emphasis. But I'm not sure yet on your writing style. I don't ever give 5/5 because I believe that there's always room for improvement. No one's ever perfect. So I gave you a 4/5. |
by Kelly L
I love this one too! You did a great job avoiding the cliches. |