But now i won't

this poem is really good.. but it's kinda sad because you woudl do all of this stuff for a girl and then when they need you the most you wont be there. humm thats life Ü

~April~

Nice Job..your poem was really good..you are so lucky you can get things to rhyme..geez..it was great..i like it the way it it to..hahah

claire nicholle..*

i like it the way it is. great poem, i say the same thing now lol
xoxo xoxo samara

Well I like it, but the verb tenses aren't right...

"When you fell i would catch you
when you called i will answer you
when you cried i will wipe your tears
when you were scared i would make you have no fear
But Now if you need me i won't be here"

It should be:

When you fall i will catch you
when you call i will answer you
when you cry i will wipe your tears
when you are scared i will make you have no fear
But Now if you need me i won't be here

*Or (I think this one is the best way, all in past tense...) :

When you fell i would catch you
when you called i would answer you
when you cried i would wipe your tears
when you were scared i would make you have no fear
But Now if you need me i won't be here

Once you change it, it will make more sense...

xxx

Wow that was soo good I love it....
Sarah~