No More Promises

by SuperJenius   Aug 1, 2005


When you look at me who do you see ?
Look inside that part of you , where you hide to protect yourself , that's me .
Some things are hidden deep , some i only remember in my sleep .
Promises of secrets made long ago still scary enough to keep
You 'll never understand the reasons why
Understand , I don't even expect you'll try
I'll never be able to share
You say you know me but you don't know my life is a LiE
You say you are my friend but your helping me is just a trend
Wait till you know my worst
Then we'll see if you're here in the end
I reach my hand to help you , it can only be but one
Someone who is helping me is holding onto the other one
The water so cold and dark
I've fallen in way too deep
I only have to open my mouth to breath
I have no promises left to keep

*** i put together different verses from failed poems and mad one poem so the pattern is weird ; tell me what you think ***

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  • 19 years ago

    by Ally xo

    thankx for commenting me.. i always comment back...wow dat poem made me speechless it was very unique and i liked it alot...i can tell ur gunna make some great poems u got TaLenT crap u may b better then most ppl on this site.. i am reading all of ur poems and some i wud never even think about writeing but i wish i came up with them but they prop wudn't turn out as GrEat as urs.. well i guess all i am trying to say is ur really gud and keep it up...
    much luv xo

    Ally

  • 19 years ago

    by Minkus

    Personally, I like the random-ish style. Good write, 5.

  • 19 years ago

    by AntiSocial16

    i think that was a very creative idea! i liked it a lot! though i dont like the fgact you said "failed poems". there are no such things, ther'yr just not taken by others for the beauty that you saw them for. keep writing and stay safe, strong, and healthy!
    AntiSocial16
    ps: thanks for the comments on my "Why Butterfly" poem and "Killing Me" poem. sorry it took so long, i was grounded!

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