heres something you could do to make this poem flow better, the 3rd section, last line, take out the word that....5th section add in the word, of, "from all of that days pain" and it will flow more beautifully...if you dont wanna do that, thats ok...it was just a suggestion! but it's an awesome poem! keep writing! you're awesome

really very good, u write well!! i really understand! thanks for ur comments on mine, much appreciated xxx

omg...brilliant poem. thats so true, its really hard to bring yourself to do it...
please never leave..stay strong and take care. your a wiked writer, keep up the good work and thanks so much for your comment xx

Awww jodie i know how u feel come on talk to me plz come online i miss u so much k ttys i hope love u

Aw good job. I like this poem alot and you have great talent. keep it up!

Its lovely poem... keep up the good work !!

I like your poem very much, good writing skills =)
Check out some more of my poems too xx

Thats so sad..i can relate to it..i just added a new poem abt my ex..so it will mean alot if u comment on it

Someday ill bring myself to do it..
...but someday isn't now

its really powerfull stuff jodie. thanks so much for you comments :) they mean alot...

and i have a touch? lol your poems are amazing, i only hope things get better for you. sam xoxox