WOnderful...I really like it. Looking at some of ur poems I would separte the words more. But I like this poems. Keep writing
Juls

Really like it, too...... Goin to read more..

Nice i like it then again I like a lot of em' lol

Laura

Nice job on this. Very unique. I do have a suggestion. Seperate the poem into stanzas, it will make it flow better and will be easier to read. Your word choice here is good and so is the imagery!

Sorry to say that I am not impressed.

"bright sunset after the darkness"

I liked that. This poem just lacked structure and flow. It was freeverse, I understand. Yet it was like this was written as a narrator, not a poem. It gave me no emotion.

And I must comment on your comment, Man of Your Dreams. That poem was about me. How is that not personal? It explains anticipation, worry, loneliness.

Just work on your flow. It seems as if you have a wall surrounding YOUR feelings. You just write about topics, not things you experience.

Nice poem...... It didn't really flow well and it isn't really the type of poem I enjoy reading...... But there was some very good use of words in there. 4/5 Good job.