i enjoyed reading it, you have a talent. keep up the good work, and dont stop writing

I don't understand why this poem was voted so low. It has a great flow/rhythm. Besides a few minor spelling things and whatnot (by the way, in the second line I think you should have "an" instead of "and"), it was a great poem. I just can't get over the wonderful flow your poetry has. It's like music that you read in a normal voice.

That probably doesn't make sense but I hope you get the idea. :)

By the way, it's spelled "wonder", not "wounder". :)

Sam

Actully I can understand what you're saying. I usally have music in the background (although singing takes away my concentration), or I think of a tune when I write poetry to get a better flow in it, could be worth a shot, I'd like to think it works for me:)

Best wishes,
Patrik

i like how you can rhyme the whole poem and not use the same word(s) over and over again. thats so awesome

i really liked this one too. keep writting!
crystal

Very nice way to tie everything up. I liked the imagery in tha last stanza also. Keep up the good work.