Not to be opposite here. But a little constructive critism is always helpfull right ;) The theme was excellent, but it wasnt a Rondeau. A Rondeau usaually has between 10-13 lines with typpically 2 ryhmes throughout. And the opening phrace is repeated twice. :D great piece otherwise, kind regards from Kane

Im questioning your reasoning here Sabine :S I count 2 rhymes in this poem, but 3 refrains. The refrain is the opening line, and is repeated 3 times, though you dont use the entire opening line, so im not sure if it counts as a refrain either :S Sounds more like a chorus! :D Sorry for being so annoying, but i enjoy being able to discuss poetry with people :) Its still a good poem, its just me being annoying, sorry :( Kind regards from Kane

I like this style, suited your purpose and worked on your strengths.

This is great, practice away it's the only way to truly learn this great art of expression. I liked the theme and the structure was good, though I do agree with Kane Burden I think that there a few bits to work on. Hope you don't mind me saying so, but once again I always like your work and this is no exception at all!