Slipping Under

by Becky   Aug 5, 2005


I have stayed above for so long
but now i finally see
i don't have to be strong
now i can finally be free

i am slipping under
this time I'm not coming back
please don't wonder
why my heart turned so black

for it was you, you see
you left me to wilt
and now I'm burying the key
to unlock all your guilt

I'm sorry it had to be this way
but now i am going to die
you can not make me stay
you can just watch and cry

i have fallen below
now you can all forget
you can all just let go
for i have paid my debt

please vote and comment it would really mean alot to me right now is a really hard time for me and if you would vote and comment it would help a great deal thaxe
lots of love
☼Becky☼'

( i will return the favor as well)

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  • 18 years ago

    by BeautifulxMess

    I noticed a lot of punctuation and capitolization corrections that were needed. Overall it was a very good poem, but if you just correct those errors makes your poem flow, and more understandable. Not to put you down it was a very good poem. Those things are just what would improve it. Still a 5/5!

    God Bless,
    Taylor

  • 18 years ago

    by Brokeback

    Such a beautiful poem !

    xxx

  • 19 years ago

    by Matters

    I love it.. you're a really great poet with lots of talent... I've enjoyed reading your poems. Very sad yet effective poem, well done on it. I'm sorry you're having a hard time... look up. Full points.

    Thanks for the comment too. Yeah, finding out my girlfriend cut kind of sucked... urgh.

    ____________________________Matt___________________

  • 19 years ago

    by nightschild

    Wow what a beautiful poem
    I no how u feel but things will get better soon.
    An excellent poem. Well done
    ~*NiGhTs ChIlD*~

  • 19 years ago

    by quick&painless

    im sorry you're having a hard time, i hope things work out for you. great poem...

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