This was very good especially for your first try at that new style. Great job LIndsay Dear
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This was true to the form of a villanelle, but not necessarily to the finer points of writing them. Villanelles, though repetitive, follow the same essential construct as a story. There should be a turning point/climax around the 3rd or 4th stanza, where either your meaning shifts or some sort of conclusion is brought about. You have certainly shown that you are more than able to handle this difficult form of poetry, but you should also try to refine your capacity to control the meaning of your well-wrought words.