Flows very well except for the last stanza, Has good struction, Use of words create a very strong image in my mind, very strong poem though. All in all, good job.

Well needless to say it is exremely well written and effective poem.

Even so i have to say i do not like it, personally. this is not because of any of your writing because it has no flaw structurally but i find it slightly unpleasant and again i must say this is my thinking because your poem has really affected me and that's why i dislike it, mainly because the imagery is so powerful that it shocks me in a way.

"Twisted and broken with memories unsaid" This doesn't seem to fit as well as the rest of the poem and at the same time it is just the perfect wording. I know this will not make sense because i both love and dislike the poem so i guess it has confused my emotions.

Jemma

Strong write. I love the emotion you put behind every word you wrote . This makes your poem so meaningfull and sad.

Keep up writing such unique poems that make us think about this theme for a time.

Lots of love
Sabine

meaningfull poem, i liked reading it, it has lots of meaning and is really effective due to wonderful wording.

well done
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omg that was awsum kt!
talk 2 ya soon when im allowed 2 cum back 2 skool!
luv amy
ps - ok i'll think about a luv poem and i'll post it when its dun

Heya,
I liked this because it shows how bad war is and how many people suver(sp?)
the flow was pretty good and it was easy to read while enjoying it at the same time.

much love x)

omg.. that was so sad.. i liked the emotion.. and ur last two lines just summed it up for me..
keep goin
nonz

Awsome! you're skill is great! i love how you explain this, it reminds me of the Black Plaugue, it's exactly like it almost. 5/5