wow loved that poem.
it was so different. the rhyming patter and the well used words pull u in:)
well done

Jacs
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it was really good but i dunno about all the ING's...its just a little to much for me. 4/5

@ andrea:

Kind of the meaning was to have every last word rhyme with ING's (which you probably understood:p). Was just in "that kind of mood" when I wrote it.

Best wishes,
Patrik

i think this was ok. i didnt feel much when i was reading it. i guess maybe im in2 more detailed emotional poems. im certainly no expert in poetry tho so i'll give u a 4.

this is really good . . . and thank you so much for your comment it was so sweet

wow well done on this poem very good flow ... 5/5 and i mean good flow

Great job.. liked the flow of it! Um don't see any improvements that need to be made.. it all went together nice and smoothly. 5/5

Not the greatest. It could use some work. the 'ing's was a little distracting for me. i'm not sure why. It was alright. Keep on keepin on Pat. ~Drew

i like the way this one was written, but it seems as if with this style of writing, it would be better if it was shorter. i definitely love your stanzas though, the flow and the way you tie everything together and explain what you're saying in the poem. overall very good.

take care
Sara