it's an aswome poem, i was writen beautifully, good job, my favorite part is the ending, "Locked forever in this land
This land of dark, black sand" it's very good

OMG... that was absolutely brilliant! This is one of my favorite poems i have ever read!! I totally understand the metaphor you used. It's not obvious and thats what i love about it. I actually had to read between the lines!! Also, i love how the black rain represents your sins and how you can't get away but you cut your ties with 'her' and what a mistake. Absolutely brilliant!!!:D

Ana*

i have to say that was wonderful... the words are so touching I can tell it's coming from your heart.. great job..

Tis was an awesome poem too! It was so deep! Like the way you write is so intensifying and you feel like you are there. I Love it!