wow really good poem...i think i liked this one better then the other one...great job 5/5!!! keep it up...luv yas mwah

-kayla-

Beautifully written.... you really captured the feeling of hopelessness....it seems to be full of gloom...I would hope the "he" waits long enough to prove the statement, "For he will never be loved," wrong...I don't know how fictional it is...but for the poem, it worked perfectly.

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WOW! this is a very thought-provoking piece. I can't believe you only have 4 votes on this. It is a wonderful poem.

omg!! i luv this one its just so....awesome i luv it. good job keep up the good work.

Its a over used topic but I liked yours better than most :)

The flow was good :)

well done :)

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very heartfelt, really sad. Alot of emotion was put into this. good job

good ryming scheme
'Through the deep, deep hole...'
i think if you said 'depths of the hole...'
instead of saying deep twice, it would streangthen it a little.