by SuperJenius Aug 5, 2005
category :
Dark, fantasy /
other
There is a killer in the shadows waiting for you to pass by |
by Kendall
That ending was wicked suprising the poem could use more.. how do i word this.. flow? i suppose? like it seems more like a paragraph but perhaps i'm not reading it right. |
by LadyPearl
Very surprising ending. Catchy beginning. You could still work on the flow. |
by Samey
That was awesome! keep it up! |
GREAT POEM,FULL OF EMOTION. MY POETRY LIKE YOURS IS FUELED BY EMOTION. I WOULD LOVE TO SEE WHAT YOU COULD DO WITH SOME OF THE OTHER EMOTIONS LIKE EXCITEMENT OR HAPPINESS. GOOD JOB |