aww so very cute...this one flowed a lot better....nice job....hope everything works out...:) luv as mwah

-kayla-

It's beautiful. It's so sweet:) I've felt that way about a guy before, and it hurt like hell so i can def. relate to this poem lol. *hugs* Keep up the great work sweets.

~Jessica

nice story... sad love story.. i love them. quite well written. cant wait to read ya other ones. peace

Hey...
I enjoyed the poem it was a awsome read however, i personally thought that this stanza as followed made the poem come together amazingly.

"but if your happiness
lies not with me,
then i can only watch
filled with jealousy."

the thing i enjoyed about this poem was it conveyed one specific emotion hense the title i guess lol...and you took one specific emotion and had the ablity to turn it into something more deeper and more alive with simply words....awsome job and well done

take care

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Dude, I totally relate to this poem. TOTALLY. Well written, I am going to add you to my favorites.

TOtally desciibes hOw ii feel! ii thiink yOOh tOOk iintO gOOd cOnsiideratiiOn abOut hOw a lOt Of giirls feel. wOnderful poem 5/5

AWW. i L0VE iT 5/5.

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That was really good. Such emotion conveyed, I enjoyed it.

"anything in the world
the break y'all apart."

One thing I would suggest is, you shouldn't say "y'all" in a poem. Especially a poem with the nature such as this one. It just doesn't fit.

Good job, nonetheless.

Another great poem my friend. You really are a talented writer. Women will definitely fall at your feet with poetry like this.

Awwww. Another wonderful poem! Wow just I don't know what exactly to say.
Keep up thte great work and thank you so much for the comments!
God Bless 5/5

~*Tay*~

Aww...this is soo sweet..the poem really touched me..I really love it..very marvlous..the thoughts were really deep..I loved it..
-sarah